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Tuesday 20 September 2016


This is my story that I have been doing for writing. I have been learning how to retell a story and it's called SOAR.
I hope you enjoy my writing.

SOAR
1. Crash Landing
2. Fixing
3. Bright light shines


“Wow!” As I peacely flew across the sky in my aircraft suddenly I dropped and fell onto a brown old looking table “ Crash ” as my aircraft landed. As my aircraft was upside down leaning against the middle of a tree, I jumped out just like a little ant and grabbed my brown old bag and walked closer to my aircraft. Well I popped out I noticed a little girl but she was bigger than me I was scared, I grabbed the Sharp pencil and pointed it at her. Sadly I looked at my aircraft and it was broken and felt like sadness.


With a frown on Mara’s face I knew she had an Idea. She grabbed the scary shark pencil off me and fix my aircraft with tape and  4 pencils to make 2 propeller. After she fixed it well tried to fix it she pulled the string and my aircraft started “drim drim” as it started, she threw me and my aircraft and we flue for 2 seconds and then I suddenly dropped. I sat depressedly on a grey rock and hung my head. Mara was depressed to. As the wind blew her instructions paper flue into her sad face then she had an Idea, she needed it worked.


Mara grabbed some tape, string and the instruction paper and fixed it. As the sun was setting I hopped in my aircraft and Mara flue me into the sky and I stay up there. As I was flying up in the air I walked to my bag and grabbed my big bright star and let it float up into the air and it was shining bright like a diamond and all the other stars lite up. I looked down and Looked at Mara I gave her a sign By saying Bye, waving my hand at her by flashing my star. Bye Mara. Hmm? Mara glanced  then she smiled.

The End
Here is the video.


6 comments:

  1. Hi Awatea its Makere here. I like how you made the story seem real and not a fairy tale. Was it hard retelling the story in your own words?

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  2. Hi Awatea Its me Patiola
    I really like this.
    I like how you made this story from a fairy tale.
    Its really cool.

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  3. Hi Awatea Its me Patiola
    I really like this.
    I like how you made this story from a fairy tale.
    Its really cool.

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  4. Hi Awatea Its me Te Aranga Mai I like how you made the story seem real and not a fairy tale. Was it hard retelling the story in your own words?

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  5. Hi Awatea Its me Te Aranga Mai I like how you made the story seem real and not a fairy tale. Was it hard retelling the story in your own words?

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  6. Hi Awatea,I am Letisha from Tautoro School. I really like the way that you have set out you blog you are so cool. I really enjoyed watching your animation. How long did it take to make the movie??

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