Hi Awatea!:) My names Georgie, from Papakaio school. I thought your story was very detailed and cool. Awesome use of a hook at the start. Maybe next time you can focus on the exciting things instead of putting on your shoes to improve the piece of writing. GOOD JOB!:) You should definatley have a look on my blog, linked to the Papakaio blog,it's called Georgie's Original Blog.
Hi Awatea!:)
ReplyDeleteMy names Georgie, from Papakaio school. I thought your story was very detailed and cool. Awesome use of a hook at the start. Maybe next time you can focus on the exciting things instead of putting on your shoes to improve the piece of writing. GOOD JOB!:)
You should definatley have a look on my blog, linked to the Papakaio blog,it's called Georgie's Original Blog.
From Georgie-Papakaio-yr 8
Hi i'm from Papakaio school. I really liked your story and the hook at the start. NICE!!! was it cold?
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